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Why you shouldn't go... by ~pardonM3:iconpardonM3:



When you lose your footing,
you might just lose yourself, slipping
deep into an unchartered womb of rock,
straddled by walls too sheer or too wet
to climb. There is no "other way out".
Several of these spiders are poisonous,
but not deadly. The rats know better
than to get close. Glow worms are
too pretty to eat. Bats shit on you.

Belly-up on the cool floor and smelling
like a dead fish, you think
of your poor, tired mother, your
thick-skulled brother and
your crotchety old cat, who--you
suddenly realize--never liked you
and will probably piss
all over your memory.

When you starve, know this: the body
enters survival mode to protect
its most vital organ. The heart
settles in its sac as time slows
down; hair and nails halt
their growth, cell-division
suspends. With only water, you may run
for days on emergency energy reserves.
But when those deplete, you deflate,
exhausted. Out of fat, you begin to eat
away at muscle. Even your heart
shrinks. Nothing is left
sacred.
©2009 ~pardonM3
:iconpardonm3:

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EDIT: Ok, so I wouldn't call this a major edit, but it isn't minor.

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(Half-digested animals are no longer cannibals.)
The brain will shut down vital body processes, even when in danger, to protect itself.

Full title: Why you shouldn't go exploring remote areas all by your lonesome

Tell your kids! But perhaps in a nicer way. ;p

June Prompt #1 - Hell freezes over

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:iconyouinventedme:
ohmy!

--
an antique arms and armor expert
:icontwistedalyx:
When you lose your footing,
you might just lose yourself, slipping
deep into an unchartered womb of rock,

Several of these spiders are poisonous,
but not deadly. The rats know better
than to get close. Glow worms are
too pretty to eat.

Belly-up on the cool floor and smelling
like a dead fish,


You're writing again, you're writing again. :icontarddanceplz:

--
[insert something witty here]
:iconpardonm3:
Lions & tigers & bears ain't got nothin' on this.
:iconpardonm3:
It's taking a lot of effort, though. :lol:
These recent posts are only here because I've had an important pair of eyes look over them first.
They were written sometime in the last week. I don't remember when.
:iconchugglepuff:
I love "unchartered womb of rock" especially, and the the way you end this without offering any comfort. "Nothing is left sacred" is an awesome last sentence.

--
A stitch in time mucks up the space-time continuum.

Clicking this link will give you superpowers*.

*May just be a very sneaky way to make you look at my page. But probably not.
:icontwistedalyx:
Well, whatever it takes.

But I know the feeling. I'm dragging myself through my current work in progress, and I don't like the way it's turning out yet... :no: I'm writing like a caveperson. You know, banging my club against the keyboard. :B

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[insert something witty here]
:iconblue-strawberry:
blimey.

Belly-up on the cool floor and smelling
like a dead fish, you think
of your poor, tired mother, your
thick-skulled brother and
your crotchety old cat, who--you
suddenly realize--never liked you
and will probably piss
all over your memory.


It gets to everything you ever had as well as everything else. That hit me like ton of bricks.

A very vivid description of despair and suffering - can't quite bring myself to say it's great =p

--
You have four nostrils, just to let you know.
:iconpardonm3:
This was really more of a 'I learned something really cool on the Discovery Channel, I need to write something about it' kind of thing.

A ton of bricks is more than I could hope for. :p

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